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lol interesting take. i think that this could have been better, but its an okay submission. heres some constructive crit [don't take me as harsh, jst trying to be helpful]:
1) the lead synth that had some LFO on it seemed like a strange choice - i mean, it kind of works, but the atmosphere it makes is kinda weird sounding lol.
2) the percussion seems really weak to me, honestly. i know u were going for a different sound than the usual cliched basshunter rave song, but i think it could have been better in that respect--the clap is weak, the cymbals have a weird lo-fi synthetic quality that doesn't jive with the feel of the song very well, and the bass drum is weak--boost up higher levels, layer it to make it last longer, make it louder, idk.
3) the arrangement of notes was very good, though--good job on that! i didnt hear the original song before, but im assuming some of the melodies of the pads are your own, so it sounds very good - those came out well, with the strings and the notes playing every 16th note.
4) finally, i wish the melody had some variation--i dont mean necessarily changing the tone of the song or the melody itself, but play with the synth to make it mor einteresting--chop it up, make it modulate, change filter effects, whatever--just make it different as the song continues and that way itll be very clutch.
5) finally, good job with transitions--the song definately flowed well.
overall, decent song, with some touching up and revamping, it could be awesome. gj for now, and i hope you improve in the future :)
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